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06-05-2003, 04:49 | #1 |
Agent Mad Squirrel
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My first attempt at poetry....
This is my first attempt really at poetry...be brutally honest please...
If Only... Your memory Your face Invade my mind They haunt me Like it was yesterday If only I could Have one more day If only I could See you once more The memories Of times we were happy Of times with no worries But now you're gone And there's nothing I can do If only I could Have made every second count If only I could Have made you happier Maybe I could have Convinced you to stay Maybe if I had Done things differently You would still be here with me If only I could Stop the pain If only I could Change the way I feel today |
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06-05-2003, 04:51 | #2 |
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Well, it's ok. I think it needs more..... I don't know, just more.
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06-05-2003, 04:56 | #3 |
Agent Mad Squirrel
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thanks bgirlnikki. i kinda saw that too, but i'm not really sure where i'm going with it, or even where i went with it...
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