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26-03-2004, 06:11 | #1 |
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Vanilla scent. song-poem
Hi everybody!!
I would like to show you this. i wrote it a few days ago. Plase say something about it..If you think is good, horrible, corny...but say something, I want to know if i have some talent as a writer... Thanks! VANILLA SCENT 23/03/04 5pm when the wind brough me her scent and a wave of beige blew me away the world ceased to exist and her scent of vanilla took its place. I'm at her mercy, completely powerless Like an idiot hanging in this moment Poisoned with all her charming In a blissful state of mind. She takes my breath away when i feel her vanilla scent And she has her way with me everytime she's dressed in beige. And If I could only keep one memory It would be of her I won't need to think it twice it would be of her. Utterly intoxicated I have gone insane I'm chasing shades of beige I'm craving for her vanilla scent. She's invaded all my senses I'm at her mercy, completely mesmerized The world's ceased to exist I give up, I can't resist... She takes my breath away when I feel her vanilla scent And she has her way with me everytime she's dressed in beige. And if i could only keep one memory It would be of her I won't think it twice It would be her vanilla scent. |
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26-03-2004, 07:06 | #2 |
I don't waste my time
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That's pretty good
I think you have talent, you just need more practice and I'm sure you'll be great |
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26-03-2004, 23:21 | #3 |
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thanks staringelf! I have some others i like more than this but this has a special meaning for me Thanks for that!
I promise i will practice more! thank youuu |
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