So You Say

[teaparty]

Sitting in the here
water running
for me...crying
like raining
then I know

How long has it been
since we held together
how long will it be
Till this love ends
She says that it hurts
I can't disagree
But how can we hold on to something that is so fragile

And then she says she is gonna be okey
She tells me things are getting busier these days
and she says everything is gonna be alright
You know how much I need her in my life

I could hold her hands
Until we breakdown
So what happens next?
I don't know anymore
To feel alright again

So she says we are gonna be okey
And she says everything is going to be alright
You know how weak this love is
But she just look like she did before

And she says she are going to be okey
She promises things will be much easier someday
and she says everything is going to be alright
You know how much I need her deep inside

Good bye yesterday
I see my life starting again
and you say everything is going to be okey...
Except she don't love me
Oh love me anymore...

excuse me and my friend's writing~
this is the first time we write poems
What do you guys think??

[narayana]

Its need a bit of eidting - but all elements are there and it is a very human song! Thanks!
Read pleas ea few more times - you will see how music in your head may change a bit the lyrics to flow....

Well done! I only hope you will write more and more!

[teaparty]

Originally posted by narayana
Its need a bit of eidting - but all elements are there and it is a very human song! Thanks!
Read pleas ea few more times - you will see how music in your head may change a bit the lyrics to flow....

Well done! I only hope you will write more and more!

thanks for the comment!!!
Yes, I'll try to to make my lyric flow~