as slowly the night falls ( a poem)

[samegirl]

Hello everybody! This is the firts time for me to post something i write in a forum. i usually post them on my site...it's not so much, a few verses i wrote on my management's class. I hope you'll like it

As slowly the night falls

Fists ready to destroy the wall
As the only tear reach the scars
Madness fill the room
Trust no one no more...
Fate written in the star
As slowly the night falls.

Mute screams in your head
Don't hide, don't you dare!
The torture almost ends...
You'll become numb, you'll faint
blood keeps coming
This won't last forever

Everywhere is hell..
It's in your head, you are there
Rage running through their veins
As your body feels the pain
Fate written in the stars
As slowly the night falls...

Wounded soul trying to crawl
too many noise, just one sharp gasp
Do you feel it? is almost here
And angel is rising, don't you see?
Bloody wings spreading
as you first step in heaven

Fists ready to destroy the wall
Close your eyes and just wait
You'll become numb
An angel's rising
As you slide your last tear
fate written in the star
you'll faint forever
as slowly the night falls

Cheers
samegirl

[madeldoe]

niiice i liked this stanza the most:

Everywhere is hell..
It's in your head, you are there
Rage running through their veins
As your body feels the pain
Fate written in the stars
As slowly the night falls...

good stuff, hope to read more

[denial]

Samegirl.. .. very nice

I love this part..

Mute screams in your head
Don't hide, don't you dare!
The torture almost ends...
You'll become numb, you'll faint
blood keeps coming
This won't last forever

[parrish122]

*Very* strong emotions in this. I like it!

Please do post more.

Parrish