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Bliss (poem, rating: pg-15ish i think)
title: Bliss
type: poem rating: around pg-15ish i think [shrugs] disclaimer: this is mine and only mine. Bliss - 112403 Flushed cheeks. Moan. Shallow breathing. Whimper. Skin infused with heat. Groan. Searching fingers. Gasp. Grinding hips - steady rhythm. Moan. Whimper. Groan. Gasp. Clenching muscles. Scream. Exquistite bliss - as the world explodes in brilliant white light. --fin. let me know what you think, eh? thanks. ![]() amikana ![]() |
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hmm, well apparently i suck. lol. no more writing stuff like this, then.
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in my brain
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Oh, I haven't read this one :P, I think it's good, although I'm not a good critic of poems, I like the description of 'that moment' with few words
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think again....
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it reminds me about this song "freak me" by another level...
here's some line... ![]() "let me lick u up and down, till u say stop, let me play with ur body baby make u real hot" seriously amikana.... ![]() its cute...hehehehehe |
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lmao - thanks
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keep 'em guessing
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i dunno, i like this one.
to me, the fewer the words, the better the poem. and you have definately captured the moment. i like this. i really do. |
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