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Old 07-07-2003, 00:18   #150
ElectraCute ElectraCute is offline
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Yulia_fan, I am so glad you are continuing your story.
I have now re-read it, and it’s even better the second time.

Actually, I’m no good when it come to giving feedback, I just want more.

But I really like the way you build up tension between Y and L, and I bet you will let them hurt each other really bad
Also I like your descriptions of their emotions. You’re balancing fine between a detailed description and letting us, as readers, do our own thinking.

I look very much forward to the next chapters.
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